Procedural Writing Learning Story

We have been learning to describe a process.

When I write, I need to think about the ideas, structure & language, organization, vocabulary, sentences, spelling and punctuation I use.  

Ideas	Structure and Language	Organization	Vocabulary	Sentence Structure	Spelling	Punctuation
-write using a range of ideas, experiences or items of information -confidently shape my ideas for effect -create content that is concise and relevant to the curriculum task -support my ideas with precise detail -uses ‘show not tell’ when appropriate	-deliberately choose a clear, controlled and logical text structure to suit the audience and purpose -show creativity and innovation when creating texts for my audience -choose appropriate adjective, verbs, nouns and adverbs.	-write in structured, well developed paragraphs that flow well from one to the next within the text -use linking words and phrases to link paragraphs for effect -Use a bullet point or number to separate the different steps	-maintain audience interest through content, humour and language choices -use language that is suitable to the topic and purpose, and discuss these choices with others -deliberately use written and visual language features when appropriate to enhance my writing; e.g similes, metaphors, personification, hyperbole, rhetorical question and diagrams -use a range of precise vocabulary to communicate meaning	-use a variety of sentence structures, beginnings and lengths to give effect -use complex sentences that are grammatically correct -use some conjunctions correctly eg: FANBOYS (for, and, nor, but, or, yet, so) -use some complex sentences	-write all basic sound and spelling patterns and use spelling rules to write unknown words -spell words correctly by drawing on knowledge of how words work	-use all basic punctuation independently -attempt more complex punctuation (eg semicolons, colons, parentheses).

Here is a piece of writing I did this term.  

I was writing to describe the process that enables a lightbulb to turn on.  Notice how I used feedback to improve my work.

To make a light bulb work you need these things.

1. 2 wires.
2. 1 battery.
3. 1 light bulb.
4. 1 switch.

1.So first, you need to connect the 2 wires to the battery.

2.Second, connect the wires to the lightbulb as well.

3.Third step, add a switch when you've done that.

4.Fourth step you can switch the switch then.

5.lastly the electricity from the battery will power through the wire to the light bulb then it will work.

Buddy Feedback:can you please check your spelling again-Seiola

Teacher Feedback:  You have got a great structure with clear steps. You’ve used specific words to help your reader know what you are talking about.  Can you change some of the ‘first’ words to make them better time connectives.

Mindfulness Learning Story

In Room 4, we’ve been learning to be mindful.

Being mindful is helpful for me because

It makes me calm and ready for learning.

There are different ways to do mindfulness.  
We can do mindful moving, mindful eating
or mindful breathing.  

The best way for me to do mindfulness is
mindful eating because I wouldn’t take my
time I would just eat sometimes.

This is because whenever I eat I don’t really
know what it smells and what it really feels like.

On this page of free resources, I recommend
you try straight back soft belly because it’s
really relaxing and it will help you to always be
not stressed but relaxed.

Justice and Injustice

In Room 4, we’ve been thinking about things that are just and unjust.

We’ve been reading a book called ‘Dawn Raids’ by Pauline Smith.

We’ve been thinking about what is just or unjust in the story.

I think it was fair when uncle Joe was translating what the Grandma and
Grandpa were saying in Samoan to the police because they just came back from
Samoa so that means that they can’t speak English very well.

I think it was unfair when the police put uncle Joe into the police car when he was
stopping Alex to hit the policeman because if Alex hit the policeman then the
policeman would be hurt so that’s why it’s unfair.

We’ve also been learning about the treaty of Waitangi.  We’ve been finding out
about promises that were broken.

I think it was fair when the minister said it was time to help those Maori who had
lost land because of the Crown’s action.

It think it was unfair when the Maori chiefs signed the treaty then later on the
pakeha broke the treaty because they were still trying to get the land and killing
some of the Maori people.

I was able to make some connections between these things and my life.  

In my life, it’s fair when I, Mia and Tea get the same amount of money when we
go somewhere out of Porirua because if we didn't get some amount someone will
get angry about the amount someone might have the most or not.

In my life, it’s unfair when my sister gets stuff for her birthday and when it’s my
birthday I get a feed and I get no presents which sometimes makes me a little
jealous.

When that unfair thing happened, I mostly just eat the food that is on the table
because if someone is showing off with their stuff I can show off with my stuff.

Swimming Learning Story

Swimming Learning Story

I have been learning swimming at Cannons Creek Pool.

In swimming, I’m really good at…

• Backstroke
• Rocket arms
• Freestyle

I’ve been learning to float on my back because whenever I float on my back I always sink because
I don’t look straight up to the roof sometimes.

Something I’d still like to learn is to swim across the whole pool without breathing.

Photos of me